Blk 222
Hougang St.21 #08-138
Singapore 530222
5th September 2010
Tan Kim Kee
The Human Resources Division
People’s Association
9 King George’s Avenue, Singapore 208581
Dear Mr Tan,
RE: APPLICATION FOR ASSISTANT MANAGER (COMMUNITY SPORTS) AT THE PEOPLE’S ASSOCIATION
I am Calvin, and I am an undergraduate currently doing a major in environmental biology in the National University of Singapore . I graduate next year, and I am eager to apply for the post of Assistant Manager (Community Sports) at the People’s Association as posted on jobstreet.com on the 4th of September 04, 2010. I have attached a copy of my resume for your perusal.
For me, the most empowering part about this job is the opportunity to be part of the community development and social cohesion process in Singapore. Being an active student volunteer in the university, this job not only allows me to learn more about the Singaporean society, but will also be a platform to apply the skills that I had picked up: the ability to network and present ideas to different target groups. The capacity of being able to lead, to maintain the team dynamics and consistently motivate volunteers is an addition to the organizational skills and systematic approaches that I have picked up while managing events. Most importantly, I believe I have both the experience and the energy to spearhead community outreach initiatives for People’s Association through sports.
Being active in both sporting and community activities in my university days; I believe I can provide a balanced perspective with regards to sport and its relationship to the community at large. With an adequate understanding of People’s Association, the National Sporting Associations and the Singaporean community, I will be one of the best candidates to be a liaison for all three parties. The various outreach tools I have picked up in terms of new media communications and design will aid me in conceptualizing different events that cater to the different segments of society.
Since independence, People’s Association has been integral in community development and social cohesion in Singapore. With the Internet and various new media available to the Singaporean population, it will be a challenge to create common experiences that bind the public together and engage different age groups of different family backgrounds. If I were to be part of this organization, I will be more than willing to overcome these challenges and put forth the knowledge I have gained regarding the various topics of people engagement and team building, marketing and organizing campaigns to good use.
Thank you for kind attention. It will be my pleasure to meet up with you in person to know more about the company, this job, and to provide any addition information that is required. On my part, there is only so much that can be conveyed through my letter, and I will contact you on the 12th of September for clarifications and enquiries regarding my application. In the mean time, I can be contacted at 9476 0101 or at chenakein87@gmail.com
Yours Sincerely,
Tan Kai En Calvin
Hi Calvin,
ReplyDeleteI am impressed in your awesome activities when I did the peer review. Your letter is convincing that you are the right person for the position.
I really like your second last paragraph in which you pointed out what chanllenge the association is facing and more importanly,what is your solution to that. You are very smart in doing so and it will definitely make your letter stand out from the others'.
However, you may work on some sentences. For example, instead of "I graduate next year", you may say "I will graduate in 2011 with a degree in...", which sounds more formal. Also you may consider the sentence structure in "Being an active student volunteer in the university, this job not only allows me to learn more about the Singaporean society, but will also be a platform to apply the skills that I had picked up".
Hey Calvin,
ReplyDeleteImpressive application letter. Very good use of language to make your point. Some points to take note of:
- "I graduate next year, and..." I think it should be, "I will graduate next year, and..."
- Your paragraphs are a little too long, so it may throw people off, especially if they have tons of letters to read. This is especially so for the 2nd paragraph.
- The spacing in between the 3rd and 4th paragraph does not seem to be consistent with the others. It looks like there is a double spacing there.
- "Thank you for kind attention." I think you missed out a word in there, your last paragraph.
thanks bro :)
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